Thursday, 19 November 2015
Wednesday, 18 November 2015
Writing term 4
On Sunday We want to my nana house because I will going to zoo. And today my birthday. I was cooking cake with my nana and my mum. First we go See my dog because my dog sick. And I come to my nana house. Next we went the zoo and mum said “happy birthday” and I said “ thank you mum”after that I said “ look!! At bare”my nana said “ I know you like bare !!! ”
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I chose this example because:
I chose this example because it's my writing about recounts in are class. |
Comment from the teacher:
Aomsin, you have learned a lot about speaking and writing in English this year. You have worked so hard to learn. You can write in sentences. You can use capitals and full stops correctly. When people speak, you use speech marks - “ ”. not brackets ( ). Brackets are used for adding in an extra mini idea. |
How I used the information in this comment to improve my writing:
I changed the speech marks. |
What I need to work on now to improve my writing:
I need to use speech marks“ ” when people speak. |



